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#1 Cris Carter

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Posted 07 August 2004 - 09:16 PM

Episode 1 - The shoreleave


Stardate 56879.0

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The assembling of the USS Poseidon reaches 70%. The Hull is fully assembled.
The first officers arrived aboard and unpack.

Captain Carter takes his time to do a small tour arround the ship.
2 hours later Counsellor Nancy Carter arrived. She was transfered from the USS Portland.

Time passes and the arrived officers feel a little like home now. The most are unpacked and taking their rounds the ship.
Until this more and more Officers arrive...

Stardate 56881.7

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The U.S.S Poseidon was granted after 3 Weeks waiting for depart, to leave the Drydock.
Admiral Paris allows Captain Cris Carter to choose a course of his own.
The Poseidon was free to go anywere.
Carter stands in Observation Lounge and thinks...
William Riker enters the Observation Lounge and ask what Cris is currently thinking.

"I am think off to go to the Poseidons grave"

Will never was on the first Poseidon and he found that was a good idea.

Cris Carter orders Senior Staff to Observation Lounge and clarified his Idea.
All seem to be well with it exclude Lt.Cmdr. David but later he agreed also.

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The U.S.S Poseidon enters the Orbit of Deneb.
The Helm Officer recomments to use a shuttle to get down.
It was a very rough clima on the surface.

The Crew enters the wreck.
Old memories come up in Carter and he sighs.
Fred tells him if he need Counselling assistance he should contact him.

All went well the crew visited several decks on the ship and memories.

Time to go back to the Poseidon says Carter.
We shall have a small Party of Memorie aboard.

The Poseidon fires a salutar torpedo into the atmosphere and it glows over all the skyline.

A nice goodbye for a good ship says Carter.

Back onboard there was a party of recognition and all celebrating very well and keep that event int their minds.

"Hope thoose event wouldnt continue..."


The U.S.S Poseidon was on course back to Starbase 11 from shakedown cruise. But the weapons werent tested. So Admiral Aquarius decides to test them first.

The Poseidon heads for a nearby asteroid belt.
Annika Hawk ordered the current shift Security Officer to go down to the weaponscontrol and allign the phasers and prepare the Torpedo Tubes.

The Ship heads for 3 Targets. One small Asteroid for Phaser test, One medium Asteroid for Photontorpedo test and one large asteroid to test the quantum torpedos.

The Test wents very well. All Weapons systems were alligned and are fully functional.

The Crew does several tasks till the ship arrived at Starbase 11.

The Poseidon docked and lower down engines.

Admiral Aquarius and Commander Maxwell head for Starbase to report in.
The other Crewmembers stood aboard and go off-duty...


To be continued...

#2 AlphaOmega

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Posted 07 August 2004 - 09:44 PM

It's good... but the writing style doesn't really flow, and there are still a few sentence structure errors in your writing.
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#3 Cris Carter

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Posted 07 August 2004 - 09:53 PM

Originally posted by AlphaOmega@Aug 7 2004, 10:44 PM
It's good... but the writing style doesn't really flow, and there are still a few sentence structure errors in your writing.

well its a pity doc phil isnt here he would fix it :P he helps me so much improove my english

#4 Nazar

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Posted 07 August 2004 - 10:22 PM

Considering you're German the spelling errors can be excused.
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#5 Cris Carter

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Posted 08 August 2004 - 03:03 PM

Originally posted by Sharky@Aug 7 2004, 11:22 PM
Considering you're German the spelling errors can be excused.

thank you. I ll try to work on it. Isnt easy though

#6 Alex Mcpherson

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Posted 08 August 2004 - 09:39 PM

ur german? i didnae know.
any back ot..
nice, um, sorry i didnt get to read it all (my neice is staying over .. shes wat, nearly 1 years old ..)

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Posted 08 August 2004 - 11:36 PM

I can tell ya, your english is a load better than my German lol.

I can speak....3 words or something like that lol
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#8 Alex Mcpherson

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Posted 08 August 2004 - 11:50 PM

hallo nightshadow spreche ich deutsches!rofl

#9 Cris Carter

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Posted 09 August 2004 - 10:27 AM

Originally posted by Alex Mcpherson@Aug 9 2004, 12:50 AM
hallo nightshadow spreche ich deutsches!rofl

uhm schlechtes deutsch *lol* (back to english)

Dont try to use translators from the web. They screw it up and spell wrong :unsure:

(oh back to topic this goes offtopic :unsure:)

#10 Matthew Bluefox

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Posted 18 November 2004 - 06:59 AM

Nice, very nice story review! :unsure:

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#11 James Young

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Posted 16 December 2004 - 05:16 AM

a bit old but still good ;)
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#12 rob philips

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Posted 02 January 2005 - 11:06 AM

yeah nice, an indeed, try to speak german when you're american B)
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#13 Matthew Bluefox

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Posted 06 January 2005 - 10:46 AM

Well said, Rob. It's not easy for me as a Swiss German to speak English, you know. :blink:

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#14 Scooter

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Posted 06 January 2005 - 08:25 PM

I have enough trouble speaking English, and it's my first language.

#15 Matthew Bluefox

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Posted 06 January 2005 - 09:27 PM

LOL @ Scooter! Same with me in German. And there are still differences between Swiss German and the normal German. :blink:

Well, Cris should have posted this in German, would have been funny. :P

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#16 Cris Carter

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Posted 17 January 2005 - 01:04 AM

Das Problem daran ist niemand kann dann mehr irgendwas lesen lol
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The problem is noone could read it (exclude some ppl)




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